fin ~ !

[lookingland]

i finished the page ~ didn't think i would have time before class, but knocked out the wee panels quickly. not sure how i feel about the overall effect.

i also fixed the balloon so it wouldn't cover the shoe (and corrected an error in my french).

all-in-all i think it's a good day's work.

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the "griffe du diable" redux

Comments

[la-vita-nuova.livejournal.com]

Sorry to keep on about the shoe - and feel free to dismiss this - it looks a lot better but the angle on the foot is still bothering me - I think realistically the top of the foot would have to be rotated a little more towards the viewer in order to be in proper relationship to the knee .

Of course, I could also be smoking crack.

[lookingland.livejournal.com]

i think you're right about the shoe ~ and to get really picky, the cross leg ought to be in front of the other guy, not behind, so there's something completely off about the way the body is turned to begin with.

though it doesn't hold up to scrutiny, i think the effect (or intention) is clear. i mean, at least it looks like a person sitting in a chair ~ hahahahaha ~

i'll have to be more careful about my contortionist anatomy ~ it's one of the things i definitely need to work on.

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[la-vita-nuova.livejournal.com]

Yeah, the intention is clear. And in a graphic novel with many illustrations the reader probably won't notice things like that that either aren't emphasized with color or relating directly to the text. I know I have major problems with positioning feet and getting them to look right in drawings - (not that i really draw anymore :() I think it's easier for me when modelling things in 3-d to see when something doesn't look quite right. It's hard too if you don't have a model, or if you have to turn yourself into a pretzel to see where the limbs go.

To address your comment about the way her body is turned - her torso is toward him but her hips are turned away - that indicates ambivalence or being less than friendly towards the other guy... I can't read French, so I dunno what you're going for, but I think your readers will definitely pick up on body language.

Also, I want to let you know that I really enjoy & respect your work - I don't want to come across at nitpicky, or critical in a bad way. Feel free to tell me to STFU anytime my comments are unwelcome. :)

[lookingland.livejournal.com]

definitely having a model helps. i stubbornly wing it too often and that makes it harder. especially when i'm very poor with perspective overall (i can fake it sometimes).

and thank you ~ i welcome your critiques ~ since this is a learning process for me, every bit of input helps. being self-taught (and a lazy student e'en so!), i need all the help i can get.

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