why'd i wake up this morning?

[lookingland]

Many suffer from the incurable disease of writing
and it becomes chronic in their sick minds.

~ Juvenal (AD 60-130)

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okay, so i'm having some issues with this triptych. first of all, i can't decide whether to actually break it into three or leave it as one (having this problem with a few other images as well. so i'll live with both versions and see which one finally asserts itself.

the other problem is this is such a text-heavy trip. i knew it was going to be, but now having placed the words, i feel overwhelmed myself. i could trim the language, but not sure how much fat i could cut and still keep the narrator's voice. i could also draw another set and spread the words over two trips, but yarg. i could probably cut "Lewis Fletcher brought us out to find the body" ~ but that doesn't really alleviate the major congestion, which is happening at the bottom.

meh und Himmel.





Himmel und meh.

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i haven't finished cleaning and i've come to what seems the very obvious conclusion that writers make characters suffer so as to maintain a perspective on suffering.

in other words, everything is status quo.

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Comments

[sparowe]

For whatever it's worth, I like the top version better....

[lookingland.livejournal.com]

that's worth something! thanks! i'm still not sure so every little bit of input helps!

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[dsch.livejournal.com]

I personally see no point in breaking it apart, since it's not really a sequential image anyway. If anything, the separation confuses the reader as to which text comes where, since "There it is" falls mostly into the third panel and the mention of pronoun choice falls into the second.

I love the art, though. But why must the musician always die?!

[lookingland.livejournal.com]

good point ~ the only reason i was thinking of breaking it was for consistency's sake: they are supposed to be triptychs after all ~ but i'm willing to throw that out the window. i agree that it's a contiguous panel and as such shouldn't have the breaks.

But why must the musician always die?!

hahahahaahaha ~ because musicians are so naturally empathetic?

don't feel too bad ~ Banjo is still alive (for the moment)

: o p

[pithhelmet.livejournal.com]

I love the sepia-ization. It seems very right for the period. And it matches my Sahibs & Memsahibs ("Friends") page background perfectly:)

[lookingland.livejournal.com]

hahahaha ~ so it does!

and thank you! i love working in duotones with some spot colors (in this case red) ~

color and i have a rather middling relationship. i really love lush colors in art, but i don't have the gift for understanding color theory that one needs for dynamic painting like that.

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